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CHAPTER 15
The phone rang. Mark opened his eyes. He grabbed for the phone.
“Hello?”
No one answered.
“Wake up call,” Mark muttered.
He looked around the hotel room. There was no one in the beds except for him. They must be at breakfast, Mark thought. Mark got out of bed and grabbed his crutches. Mark hated crutches. He had been on them 4 times before. He crutched down to the lobby and into the restaurant where the team was sitting. It was Tuesday morning in Colorado Springs. The day before the team had gone to a little track and ridden. Mark wasn’t riding yet but he planned to start the next day.
“Where’re we going today?” Mark asked.
“Supercross track,” Jordan said.
“Oh,” Mark said.
After they finished breakfast, they walked out to the van. They drove about half an hour to an old dirt road where they turned off. They drove for 5 more minutes until they came to the entrance to the track. They drove over to where the trailer was parked. The team got their bikes out. All except Mark headed for the track. Mark sat down in a chair. He had been sitting there a little while when he heard his name behind him. He turned around.
“Mark Peterson.” Standing there was a guy in a yellow and blue shirt that said “Suzuki” and “Rockstar Energy” on it.
“Yeah?” Mark asked.
“I’m Bud Smith, manager of Team Suzuki Amateur Motocross.”
“Hullo,” Mark said.
“Would you mind taking a walk with me?” Bud asked.
Mark hesitated then said, “Sure.” He got up, got his crutches, and started walking with Bud Smith.
“You’ve been doing great in the US series.”
“Yeah, I’m doing alright,” Mark said.
“Alright?” asked Bud. “You are at the top of the point standings.”
“Yeah, well-”
“How are you liking riding for TPA?” interrupted Bud.
“Oh, they’re pretty good,” Mark said. “I mean, they take me everywhere, and supply me with everything I need to race.”
“Do they supply your bikes?” Bud asked.
“Well, no,” Mark said.
“Have you always ridden Hondas?” asked Bud.
“No. When I raced 50’s and 60’s I rode KTM’s.”
“Never a Suzuki?” asked Bud.
“Nope,” Mark said.
“TPA is a fairly new- ”
“What do you want?” asked Mark.
“Excuse me?”
“What do you want?” Mark repeated. “Why are you asking me these things? Why are you walking with me?”
“Haven’t you figured it out yet?” Bud smiled. “I’m offering you a spot on Suzuki Amateur Team.”
“What?” Mark exclaimed. “Really?”
“Yup,” Bud said. “What do you say?”
Mark thought for a minute. “You see Bud, I don’t see why I should switch. TPA supplies me. We’ve got mechanics, a semi all that stuff. What would I get for switching to your team?”
“Mechanics,” said Bud. “Do you have a personal mechanic?” Mark shook his head. “On Suzuki you would get a personal mechanic.”
“What about bikes?” asked Mark.
“We supply them,” Bud said.
“I’ve ridden an RM85 and it’s not as fast as my CR85,” Mark said.
“Mark, when Suzuki gets done with you engine it’ll be 50 times better than stock condition,” Said Bud.
“Why do you want me so bad?” Mark asked.
“Because you’ve got a lot of potential,” said Bud. “Today it’s the USMXN series. Tomorrow it’s Loretta Lynn’s. The next day, Supercross Lites.”
“What about Supermini?” Mark asked. “Suzuki doesn’t make a 150, and I really like the 150.”
“We can get you an RM85L bored to 112cc and have more engine work done on it. It will be faster than your 150,” Bud said.
“I’ll have to think about it and talk it over with my Dad,” Mark said. “I don’t want to be unfair to TPA.”
“Mark,” Bud said. “It’s not about being fair or unfair. It’s about what’s best for you. Here’s my card. Get back to me.”
Mark walked back to the TPA semi, where the team was taking a break.
“Who was that guy you were talking to?” Keenan asked.
“None of your business,” Mark said. He didn’t think he wanted everyone knowing he got an offer to get on Factory Suzuki.
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Back at the hotel Mark spotted Bobby and his dad checking in. He walked over to him.
“I need to talk to you,” said Mark. “Let’s go out to your trailer.” They walked out to Bobby’s enclosed trailer and got inside.
“What’s up?” Bobby asked.
Mark told him all about his walk with Bud Smith and his offer on the Suzuki team. “Do you think I should take the offer?” Mark asked.
“It’s up to you isn’t it?” said Bobby. “If you want to be loyal and stick with TPA, or move up to first class with Suzuki and have 4 of your own RM’s lined up with your personal mechanic polishing them.”
“I better call my dad and talk it over with him,” Mark said.
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“Hello?”
“Hey dad,”
“Hey Mark, what’s up?”
“Oh, nothing really, just wanted your advice on something,”
“Shoot.”
“What would you do if you got an offer to be on Factory Suzuki with free bikes and parts and stuff, and you were on TPA. Which would you pick?” Mark asked.
“You got an offer from Team Suzuki?!”
“Yeah, today at the track. Bud Smith the manager was there and he talked to me about it.”
They talked about it for a while. Then finally Mark asked,
“Should I take it?”
“Do you want to take it?” Mark’s dad asked.
“Yes. I like the idea of all that stuff,” Mark said. “I’m gonna call Bud and talk to him.”
“Talk to you later, buddy.”
“Bye, Dad.”
The phone rang. Mark opened his eyes. He grabbed for the phone.
“Hello?”
No one answered.
“Wake up call,” Mark muttered.
He looked around the hotel room. There was no one in the beds except for him. They must be at breakfast, Mark thought. Mark got out of bed and grabbed his crutches. Mark hated crutches. He had been on them 4 times before. He crutched down to the lobby and into the restaurant where the team was sitting. It was Tuesday morning in Colorado Springs. The day before the team had gone to a little track and ridden. Mark wasn’t riding yet but he planned to start the next day.
“Where’re we going today?” Mark asked.
“Supercross track,” Jordan said.
“Oh,” Mark said.
After they finished breakfast, they walked out to the van. They drove about half an hour to an old dirt road where they turned off. They drove for 5 more minutes until they came to the entrance to the track. They drove over to where the trailer was parked. The team got their bikes out. All except Mark headed for the track. Mark sat down in a chair. He had been sitting there a little while when he heard his name behind him. He turned around.
“Mark Peterson.” Standing there was a guy in a yellow and blue shirt that said “Suzuki” and “Rockstar Energy” on it.
“Yeah?” Mark asked.
“I’m Bud Smith, manager of Team Suzuki Amateur Motocross.”
“Hullo,” Mark said.
“Would you mind taking a walk with me?” Bud asked.
Mark hesitated then said, “Sure.” He got up, got his crutches, and started walking with Bud Smith.
“You’ve been doing great in the US series.”
“Yeah, I’m doing alright,” Mark said.
“Alright?” asked Bud. “You are at the top of the point standings.”
“Yeah, well-”
“How are you liking riding for TPA?” interrupted Bud.
“Oh, they’re pretty good,” Mark said. “I mean, they take me everywhere, and supply me with everything I need to race.”
“Do they supply your bikes?” Bud asked.
“Well, no,” Mark said.
“Have you always ridden Hondas?” asked Bud.
“No. When I raced 50’s and 60’s I rode KTM’s.”
“Never a Suzuki?” asked Bud.
“Nope,” Mark said.
“TPA is a fairly new- ”
“What do you want?” asked Mark.
“Excuse me?”
“What do you want?” Mark repeated. “Why are you asking me these things? Why are you walking with me?”
“Haven’t you figured it out yet?” Bud smiled. “I’m offering you a spot on Suzuki Amateur Team.”
“What?” Mark exclaimed. “Really?”
“Yup,” Bud said. “What do you say?”
Mark thought for a minute. “You see Bud, I don’t see why I should switch. TPA supplies me. We’ve got mechanics, a semi all that stuff. What would I get for switching to your team?”
“Mechanics,” said Bud. “Do you have a personal mechanic?” Mark shook his head. “On Suzuki you would get a personal mechanic.”
“What about bikes?” asked Mark.
“We supply them,” Bud said.
“I’ve ridden an RM85 and it’s not as fast as my CR85,” Mark said.
“Mark, when Suzuki gets done with you engine it’ll be 50 times better than stock condition,” Said Bud.
“Why do you want me so bad?” Mark asked.
“Because you’ve got a lot of potential,” said Bud. “Today it’s the USMXN series. Tomorrow it’s Loretta Lynn’s. The next day, Supercross Lites.”
“What about Supermini?” Mark asked. “Suzuki doesn’t make a 150, and I really like the 150.”
“We can get you an RM85L bored to 112cc and have more engine work done on it. It will be faster than your 150,” Bud said.
“I’ll have to think about it and talk it over with my Dad,” Mark said. “I don’t want to be unfair to TPA.”
“Mark,” Bud said. “It’s not about being fair or unfair. It’s about what’s best for you. Here’s my card. Get back to me.”
Mark walked back to the TPA semi, where the team was taking a break.
“Who was that guy you were talking to?” Keenan asked.
“None of your business,” Mark said. He didn’t think he wanted everyone knowing he got an offer to get on Factory Suzuki.
------------
Back at the hotel Mark spotted Bobby and his dad checking in. He walked over to him.
“I need to talk to you,” said Mark. “Let’s go out to your trailer.” They walked out to Bobby’s enclosed trailer and got inside.
“What’s up?” Bobby asked.
Mark told him all about his walk with Bud Smith and his offer on the Suzuki team. “Do you think I should take the offer?” Mark asked.
“It’s up to you isn’t it?” said Bobby. “If you want to be loyal and stick with TPA, or move up to first class with Suzuki and have 4 of your own RM’s lined up with your personal mechanic polishing them.”
“I better call my dad and talk it over with him,” Mark said.
---------
“Hello?”
“Hey dad,”
“Hey Mark, what’s up?”
“Oh, nothing really, just wanted your advice on something,”
“Shoot.”
“What would you do if you got an offer to be on Factory Suzuki with free bikes and parts and stuff, and you were on TPA. Which would you pick?” Mark asked.
“You got an offer from Team Suzuki?!”
“Yeah, today at the track. Bud Smith the manager was there and he talked to me about it.”
They talked about it for a while. Then finally Mark asked,
“Should I take it?”
“Do you want to take it?” Mark’s dad asked.
“Yes. I like the idea of all that stuff,” Mark said. “I’m gonna call Bud and talk to him.”
“Talk to you later, buddy.”
“Bye, Dad.”
headshot347
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nice story man keep it up
LilMissJuicy
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lol
Lol thats a really long story!!! :)
Lol thats a really long story!!! :)
dirtbike_freak
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No, I think when poeple click on send message via-email it doesn't work right or something because I never got it. I'm taking a little break, just for maybe a week or something. I'm visiting relatives and I dont have that much time. Maybe on the drive home I'll right something.J-man said:
I like writhing these as much as you guys like reading them. But ocassionally when I can't think of something I do get frustarated and give up for the night. I had to get some kind of twist into the story, so thats how Team Suzuki came into the picture. I think it was the right thing to do.
Hope you guys are liking and enjoying them.
Kyle
olderndirtmom
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LilMissJuicy said:
It takes a bit to get caught up, but it is well worth it. DB_F is doing great! He's got quite a following here, if you look at the thread count.
He's got great instincts as a writer. Definitely has a feel for racing and dialog. And he's really committed to this!!
Very cool all around, to see someone writing about something they love doing "just because they got bored one night", working so hard at it and following it all the way to completion despite other commitments. :cool:
A great example for all of us.
olderndirtmom
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I liked this chapter. Several good twists.
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Sounds like you used an old email address or typed it wrong when you registered. To fix the email so it works, go to "User CP" then "edit profile" and "Edit Email". Then the link to send messages via Email will work. I sent a few suggestions also when you couldnt think of anything, but didnt want to post them in the thread so it wouldnt be a spoiler if you used them.dirtbike_freak said:
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sixds said:
Its amazing that came 9 minutes after he said he was taking a short break :laugh:
olderndirtmom
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scooter1130 said:
No actually his email is in there fine or at least was way back when I volunteered to become proofreader. My email went thru fine then.
I was the one who suggested there is some glitch because I was unable to get an email response from Wardy OR Nikki about the Midwest Ride. Although, I suppose sometimes people just don't answer their emails. At a minimum I can attest that db_f's was fine a few weeks ago but some people's haven't made it thru the forum now.
Probably some enemy spy bot in the system. (kidding). Undoubtedly something computer techy.
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ok sometimes people use fake or rarely used email address when they sign up for sights, so thought maybe thats what he had done. but its not like I have never been wrong before :laugh:
JD_MXRacer
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that was a great chapter. the twist was a great twist in the story. you are doing awesome on this story. keep it up. i will be waiting for the next chapter w/ everyone else
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very good chapter. it doesnt have to be long to have an impact on your readers. i cant wait for the next one :) .
dirtbike_freak
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Sorry for the delay I'm on vacation at my grandmas and i've been pretty overwhelmed and busy. Ill get it to you soon.
flyingfuzzball
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hey man just read them cuz im on vacation and dont have internet.
these are great!!
keep it up man you got some great ideas flowing.
these are great!!
keep it up man you got some great ideas flowing.
dirtbike_freak
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Kinda sorta. :bang:150rguy said:
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I'd really like to thank olderndirtmom. She is really great editing everything for me. I think everyone should be greatful, because if I didn't have her to proof read this, I probably wouldn't be writing this. It alredy takes about 3 1/2 hours to write and then it would take me even longer to proof it.
Thanks olderndirtmom!
Thanks olderndirtmom!
